Tuesday, October 18, 2011

Revision of CATW 1

In the article, "An Education in citizenship" by the 'Chicago Tribune', it explains how the state of Illinois has just passed a bill that's going to allow young people in the country illegally to pay in-state tuition rates at Illinois colleges and universities. The house had said that it "was an easy vote for most of the lawmakers". I agree with the house of Illinois by the following.

The state made the right decision in passing the bill because it helps the entering freshman that are illegal to get a great education for a future career. It's right that they pay a cheaper tuition pay based on their tax return. This reminds me of when my mom told me how she came to NY to get a better education. She didn't have to pay as much because she came from Ecuador and came to LaGuardia community college based on her taxes and that she was an immigrant. She knew other people that were in this situation besides her sisters.


Another reason i believe the state made the right decision is because it gives immigrants a better education even though its almost like controlling citizenship and its rights and responsibilities. For example i have seen many Mexican people in flushing that are standing around waiting for jobs. They have passed college and received a good education but their still sitting around looking for jobs. Their here illegally but they were able to get a good education but still looking for a career.


Based on the article, "An education in citizenship" by the 'Chicago Tribune',  I have explained that the house of Illinois had made the right decision in passing the bill that allows entering freshman in the college who are in the U.S. illegally to pay in-state tuition rates at Illinois colleges and universities, with my examples and evidence.  

1 comment:

  1. Hi Carlos,
    If I am not wrong you did not revised your essay.If you did the eassy could be much better. I felt that you got main idea of this essay and you have strong body parragraph but you didn't develop it well. Like I do most of times in my eassy.
    At last not the least, in conclusion don't write like you said, "I have explained....." it looks like your are forced to write.
    Thank you.

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